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    dots Submission Name: Cold Paper Time Capsuledots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This will likely get a lot of "too short" comments, but I like it, so say it all you like.


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    dotsCold Paper Time Capsuledots
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    All that's left of our home is a photograph,
    a cold paper time capsule
    of memory and emotion.





    Submitted on 2004-06-22 18:39:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this write. this makes me think of: growing up and moving out, death in the family, relocating to a new home/city, having your house get destroyed by a disaster, a family collapse (suicide, divorce etc.).

    very thought provoking, mostly not what you intended, but the benefit of minimalism. me likey.
    | Posted on 2004-07-07 00:00:00 | by jdinning67 | [ Reply to This ]
      This can stand like it is, but I think that the idea you express in the last line should be expanded on, if only for another line or two. Paint a little picture of what the memory and emotion are. Memory and emotion are just too generic to communicate what the picture actually feels like to you, unless you mean to convey that the picture of your home just gives you generic feelings.
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your minimalism. this is short, but you've packed a lot into this. it keeps me wondering what happened to your house. burned down??
    anyway great piece. I like it very much when poems keep me thinking. and by the way nice picture.
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this! i love how you can get so much into so few words... completely in awe of you... i truely am... i bumble my way round and say nothing and yet here you say SOOO much! your awesome! (and for what its worth i think your gorgeous and so brave for putting up pics of you so i think you should just ignore all those who tell you otherwise!) love ya!
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      ...and done, I think. All of it. Minimalism at its best. Why didn't you hide a clue of what happened to the house though? Good write.
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is complete the way it is. I really liked the title. And the way you come up with some amazing definitions of things taken for granted. It inspires me to see stuff in a new light.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a perfect example of what i love about your minimalism... so much can be read into three short lines... it's whatever i want it to be. photographs can illicit such emotion, at least for me, of a memory, although it is just a cold piece of paper. the memory and emotion is for me to feel when i read it!
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      the length doesn't seem to matter when you've said everything. This could be a house itself or the love of the people who created the home..
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      why peopl alwayssaying add more..im getting anoyed...i enjoyed this short and sweet as they say..ive never actually used this line but i figured why not...its lovely though as usual...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Short poems rule! (Well most of them.) Your poem has no need to elaborate... It made me think about memories.. and how I made a time capsule a few years back as well. Cool stuff. Stick with shortness
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      I like short poems.. and this one definately needs nothing more added. it's really not confusing at all to me. you hold a piece of captured time in your hands. Something never to return except in memory.. Short is cool. rock on
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah i agree with storm it could be bout anything but sorry to say to me it means nothing casue i have no clue what to think after reading something like that i mean i'm not tryin to be mean ot anything but even quotes have means or even make people think this juss made me wonder . but nice work hope i wasnt to mean i'm No talent check out my work some time
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]


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