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    dots Submission Name: Acta non verba my love (your right)dots

    Author: Polydectes
    ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154/85/38
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsActa non verba my love (your right)dots

    The stroke of my pen is an action; itís in these actions;
    that gave me lungs,
    and Muscles,
    and the freedom of movement
    to express myself and declare my love, My Love.

    Itís not just the obsession, to understand and define
    Your complexity,
    and views,
    and Your beauty, for life,
    but, for my obsession, for my actions, to speak louder than words.

    Submitted on 2007-10-16 09:46:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I find this write to be written very well
    You showed us your readers that your Heart is connected to your pen
    This shows true honest emotion in your write something that I very much appreciate
    Great Job!!!
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      "to gave me lungs" I think should perhaps be "that gave me lungs" just a suggestion, it doen't really make sense left like it is.

    Other than that...not too shabby at all...i enjoyed this, declaration is the only word i can think of to describe this....

    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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