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Acta non verba my love (your right)

Author: Polydectes
ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
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Acta non verba my love (your right)

The stroke of my pen is an action; it’s in these actions;
that gave me lungs,
and Muscles,
and the freedom of movement
to express myself and declare my love, My Love.

It’s not just the obsession, to understand and define
Your complexity,
and views,
and Your beauty, for life,
but, for my obsession, for my actions, to speak louder than words.

Submitted on 2007-10-16 09:46:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I find this write to be written very well
You showed us your readers that your Heart is connected to your pen
This shows true honest emotion in your write something that I very much appreciate
Great Job!!!
God Bless
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  "to gave me lungs" I think should perhaps be "that gave me lungs" just a suggestion, it doen't really make sense left like it is.

Other than that...not too shabby at all...i enjoyed this, declaration is the only word i can think of to describe this....

| Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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