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    dots Submission Name: Let go of it alldots
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    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 594
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I'm really stoned right now. and this just is what comes to mind. Love for weed and love for my boo


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    dotsLet go of it alldots
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    It's to late to go back,
    these iron walls around me
    are resouding with memories
    pieces of you, and pieces of me,
    floating about this room
    like noble butterflies, in a gentle breeze

    recall the euphoric times we spent
    gazing at the picturesque night skies,
    passing through the corridors of life
    without a care in the world,
    blinded by this high love,
    refusing to see the bloody end

    thinking of the weaking tears,
    ripping through my body
    i want to let go of it all again
    You...the love, the life, the fucking world
    and i let go of all cares in existance

    watch the smoke flow from this mouth,
    once more, my worries fly south
    my lips are kissing the only thing that matters
    feel like i'm flying through these night skies
    as each headache in the world dies







    Submitted on 2007-10-16 11:07:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow yes i can relate to this, it is like trying to remove a dagger that just keeps on growing back. You push the memories aside and try to hide from them but in the end the come back and just keep tugging at you. You try to numb the pain but the more you run away from it the more it grows and the stronger it becomes until it consumes you. The first love is the greatest, the first cut isnt the deepest, it fu cking splits you apart like a melon of agony. Can we ever recover from this? Can we ever be whole again? Love the same ways again?

    Great poem.

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-09-22 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great, I admire you
    Lots of emotions running through this poem
    clearly you feel the pain of something deep
    and it show

    Nice adjectives btw, (noble butterflies)
    etc
    I like your poetry, Ill stop by later and check it out.
    peace -Mike
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow....thats how i feel right now......there is just so much going on right now......me and my boyfriend of three months just broke us a week or two ago and i find myself more lonely.....and being lonely makes me wanna get stoned all the time....so i am most of the time....but it doesnt help me at all....it just makes me more of an emotional wreck....but sometimes i just wanna let go of it all and start new you know what i mean...well im very glad that i opened this poem because it really made me think.....thanx for writing such good poetry.....see ya
    ~lonely goth~
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by lonely goth | [ Reply to This ]


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