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Submission Name: Not Good Enough to Have a Name dots

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Author:	bubble_popper15
ASL Info:	17, f, in his arms
Elite Ratio:	4.09 - 141/101/32
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	112
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	681

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Not Good Enough to Have a Name dots

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The life I'm living is bad
Everyday is just the same
For some reason I'm staying sad
And no one is to blame

I have been wanting him
But, he won't take me
Everyday, my sunshine is dim
And nothing bright at all I can see

I feel like I do't belong here
In this place you call home
My feelings toward you are very severe
I'm in a crowded room, but I feel very alone

No one understands me anymore
Not even my "best friend"
I lay on my bed staring at the door
Wondering when this adolescent life will come to an end

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  i like the emotion behind it, it was fresh.
| Posted on 2008-05-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  I know you called this a loved poem and I can see why you said so but, I would rather say it’s depressed, the reason I say so; “Life is bad”, “Staying sad”, “sunshine is dim”, “I do’t (a typo) belong here”. You get the picture.

I’m not going to concentrate on how I could make you feel better, as blu_kitten already took all the glory and not bad advice if I might say so myself.

I liked your simple structure, but there is nothing that stands out, nothing that made me want to gasp for air. But it’s for that very same reason I liked it, then you are depressed you don’t want any structure, there is nothing in life that stands out, just like in your poem, you feel all alone.

You must just hang on there, fact that you write this show there is still hope and you still care.
Please keep on writing

| Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]
  there is nothing that can be done or said to make this all better
it always seems so very bad when you are staring it in the face, and it will continue to be hard to deal with for a few years, but eventually, when you look back you will be able to realize that there was enough good in there to make up for the sadness of the past
no one can tell you what to do, you will make your own mistakes, becauase we all have to, but then we all also feel like we have to give advice on situations that are similar to ones we have experienced
it is human nature to be nosy bossy little creatures, so here goes with nosiness and bossiness
if this is some boy you are pining over then he is not worth it, there will be a hundred of him before you finally find someone who loves you and that you can be with for the rest of your life, true some of us are blessed with true love early, but you must realize that this is not a common occurance and I have thought i was in love half a dozen times since i was your age until i found the one, and even now i wonder if i am more in love with the idea of being in love
but this is different, and deeper and can survive things that highschool sweethearts would forget each other over
if this is about your parents, then just think, and work hard to ge to it, that just a few more years and you will be free to go on and be happy and they will be that much more miserable because they have lost out on some of the most preciuos years of your life, and you can have so much fun and experience so much during these years that they will be so very upset at having missed it
i promise you
and as for your best friend, if you dont feel like your friend is treating you in such a way that you dont feel like she is really your best friend then you need to make new friends
its not always easy but sometimes just going to walmart or the mall without the people you usually hang out with, or going somewhere you arent used to can make a big difference in how you feel
but...back to the piece

i think you need to work a little on your structure and such

xoxo
| Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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