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    dots Submission Name: Im Addicteddots
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    Author: lonely goth
    ASL Info:    17/F/Coucil Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 28/26/27
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 138
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1176



    Description:
       well i was really hi when i wrote this....but you know its how i feel...life is shitty now adays for me and it seems like this is all i can do to get my mind off of how much i wanna kill myself...so i hope you like it....tell me whatcha think ok.


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    dotsIm Addicteddots
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    The scent of you
    Arouses me
    Im addicted
    cant you see

    The taste of you
    Intices me
    Im addicted
    cant you see

    When I get a hit from you
    All trouble seems to fade

    when i get a shot from you
    man....all i think about it getting laid

    When the pain overwhelms me
    I turn to you in haste

    When the tears fall down like rain
    I’ll just get another taste

    I know I am addicted
    Because youre my life and soul

    I know im addicted
    cuz you the only thing that makes me whole

    Nnow that he’s gone
    You’re all I have

    So one more hit
    Just one more line
    Shoot me up just one more time

    The higher I am
    The less broken I feel

    The worse of i am
    The pain doesn’t seem real

    So like I said
    Your all I have

    So one more hit
    One more line
    Shoot me up just one more time

    Cuz now I know…..
    im am and forever will I be

    Addicted




    Submitted on 2007-10-16 14:24:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Remarkably coherent for someone who was off their face. You could turn this into a song easily, and with a bit of messing about it wouldn't be half bad I imagine with a decent riff.

    Content well what can I say it's about getting [censored]ed and taking a bleak look at your life. I hope that you're exaggerating as this is a sorry state to be in if you're 16. The last thing you should be worried about is getting laid. Anyway I'm not here to get into that.

    Hope the sun shines soon
    V
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]


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