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    dots Submission Name: Squeeze my Hand if you Understanddots
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    Author: Amberdy
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 238/227/58
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 66
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       pretty self explanitory I would say...


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    dotsSqueeze my Hand if you Understanddots
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    What sort of pain is caged on the inside?
    if any at all
    Maybe the drugs suppress it
    as they are supposed to.
    I pray that you never suffer.
    Do you hear the emotions
    we could never conceal?
    It's far too overwhelming.

    Do you hear us
    when we cry,
    when we ask you to open your eyes?
    Can you hear
    the pain in our voices
    as they shake with desperation?
    Squeeze my hand if you understand!
    Move your legs if you can...

    This has become a long distance run
    drawn out entirely too far.
    And you hang on
    becuase you're so strong;
    The strongest I have come to know,
    although your body
    has reached it's weakest point.

    A good friend told me as I began to rest,
    that most of the growing
    takes place in the valleys
    for the mountain tops are mostly rock.
    In this low point
    we are somehow nourished,
    but let us begin to transcend
    and exceed every expectation.
    We will help carry you.
    Just please dont give up now,
    You have come so far!

    Can you hear the songs we sing to you?
    You always loved our singing.
    You always called us your favorite girls.

    We miss you so much.
    Please, please wake up!
    Squeeze my hand if you understand...
    and open your eyes if you can.






    Submitted on 2007-10-16 17:55:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Death is a mystery. Life is a mystery. Enduring the reality of both isn't so simple. Sorrow ran down my spine from reading this. A very good piece of work here. I can relate to this poem with great comprehension. Very good work. Hang in there and don't give up.
    | Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by WD | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't it a joy to have hope! Its more of a joy to have love. Its greater than the two to pray in blend the mix.
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      while writing this piece gave you none of the answers you long for i hope it helped in asking the questions outside of your head/heart.

    it is hard to sit by and watch someone die [which i assume to be the case here].

    i think your 'squeeze my hand if you understand' plea is beautiful. i know when my grandfather was in hospital and as he got sicker and sicker it was hard to watch. i spent 11 hours beside his bed the night before he died. when i left i knew i woudnt see him again and i whispered in his ear "if i put your teeth in and put your glasses on you would still look nothing like my grandpop so when i walk out of here i am just going to erase this image from my mind and remember you how you used to be... strong and smiling..." i gave him a kiss on the forehead and he opened his eyes [which he hadnt done for days] and i found the recognition/understanding i needed from him.

    i pray that you make it through this time.
    that your grief does not over whelm you.
    that you do indeed grow during this time. i thought it interesting what you said about growing in the valleys coz the mountains are mostly rock... ive always known growing was a valley thing but i never thought of it like that...

    take care.
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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