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    dots Submission Name: stroll arounddots
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    Author: Polydectes
    ASL Info:    26/m/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 144/72/34
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 504



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    How peaceful here with tar for rivers
    Skip pass whores to show some rank
    Pass the justice as they drank.
    Just like their fathers and their mothers.

    No more the priest or the academic.
    Now it’s a playground for this epidemic,
    Luckily this poison is only systemic

    You asked God to save your soul today?
    Yesterday you asked to please go away?
    Just one more shot, and then I’m done,
    Bang, one by one, it’s gone.




    Submitted on 2007-10-17 10:09:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like satire and you used it very effectively in this poem. There's such a fragile balance in all of life or phoof...we're dead either intellectually or physically. Observation makes for great poetry and you obviously do not overlook life around and about. I love it when a piece grabs my attention in the first line (tar for rivers) and ends with a bang! Great job on this one, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      there is a certain dry humor to your writing that draws me to it
    its entertaining, and makes me think
    and all the time i cant help but see the born writer in you
    this is great
    in just a few short pieces you have shown me a wonderfully magnificent talent that i hope just keeps growing

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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