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    dots Submission Name: Avenge This Poisondots

    Author: Dimension_X
    ASL Info:    17/F/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 124/108/70
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Random thoughts during my Lit Class.

    Stems off of "Hamlet"

    Comments would be well appreciated.

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    dotsAvenge This Poisondots

    Circle, square, smaller square.
    Blue, green, lighter blue.

    You're giving a validation/
    /a reasoning
    to a villian of sorts.
    Machevelli's Iago
    to a lesser power.

    The devil of temptation has sent his ghost
    to avenge his poisoning-
    and that of his wife.

    A summoned spirit
    concerned for his country
    and its inevitable demise.
    Soul - unrested and uneasy
    telling the dreaded tale of the downfall
    of wives, sons, and citizens.

    Is this being from
    beyond the clouds.?
    or from the
    hell of Hades' domain?

    Open your celestial lips
    and speak, spirit.
    What are you here for?
    and what are your motives?

    Is there fire sparking in your kindred soul?
    Playing upon the loss of your son.
    Blood boiled in confusion.

    Circle, square, smaller square.
    Returning to one point again,
    even though it never left to begin with.

    Submitted on 2007-10-17 10:18:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting. I can see somewhat how it stems off of Hamlet. It's been ages since I read it though.

    The only part that doesn't seem to fit is:

    "Circle, square, smaller square.
    Blue, green, lighter blue."

    What in the world is that? How does it connect with the rest of this? I'm all confuzzled.

    Otherwise, very classicly styled. Good job.
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      "Open your celestial lips"
    i dont think i have heard that before, i loved that line...it was a very nifty way of putting that

    this was very cool, very interesting
    random thought is the best way to write, I think, it just feels more natural
    i hate it when something feels forced and coerced
    you did this quite well
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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