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    dots Submission Name: i thought you were on my sidedots
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    Author: rastas edible
    ASL Info:    32/m/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 10/10/7
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsi thought you were on my sidedots
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    i thought you were on my side in this
    fixed game of days
    my girl for good and worse times spent
    at least together,
    or drunk and collapsing
    or naked and spiteful in the slick neon of
    a Parkdale night

    but there are no boundaries on this trust of
    fate...only tossed coins in supermall wishing wells...only small splashes and wrong endings

    only broken words over a broken phone line because i was so far away that the syllables couldn't make the stretch...and your accent
    became a sudden weapon
    registered on my voicemail...
    boom boom and a flatline




    Submitted on 2007-10-17 14:14:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow rofl
    this was one of the weirdest poems ive ever read
    very difficult, but I did make out a lot of what you were trying to express
    except the last part.
    maybe a broken relationship and a phone call to end it all?
    boom boom and a flatline like you said ;)

    good job- Bill
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]



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