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Submission Name: False Idea Of Beauty. dots

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Author:	Demon__666
ASL Info:	19/f/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:	2.47 - 283/317/92
Words:	132

Class/Type:	Poetry/Being a Teen
Total Views:	192
Average Vote:	4.5000
Bytes:	856

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This is how i felt. PASSY DO NOT COMMENT ON THIS POEM YOU NEVER HAVE ANYTHING NICE TO SAY AND YOUR POETRY SUCKS. You just fucked with the wrong person.

False Idea Of Beauty. dots

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Every single airhead blonde,
With their pretty fucking clothes,
Dont eat a thing,
So lets look like barbie.

A false idea of beauty.

Boob jobs and face lifts.
Cant you all just fucking be happy?
Everyone wear whats in style,
Go on another day, fake a smile.

Its your false idea of beauty.
Through which everyone can see.
You think were just so ugly,
Stop, look, see,
How perfect do you need to be?

To you we are just a stain,
Well let me tell you what you fucking clone,
At least our beauty is real.
Fuck your little ideal.
We have our own reflections.

No barbie wanna be's
I love people who are dark.
I love people like me.
So fuck you, you fucking barbie!

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  I liked this one... I know how your feel. There are lots of barbies at my school and there are lots of dark people.... I am someone who seems inbetween barbie and dark... normal... because i dont let the dark side show. But I like this poem. I want to print it out and post it everywhere around my school :P

-Elissa
| Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by hateyourlove | [ Reply to This ]
  Hahaha, I love this one, it's very... realistic. Its truthful on how people act as something they want to be, maybe they should just quit and be unique, be themselves. But no, they're too stupid to see sense. I love dark people too, lol. They rock!!! Hope to hear more! Shadow
| Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ranting again I see. Its okay, your still my dark BFF. This poem totally yelled you. I think this is a very opinionated poem... good! I like to hear your opinions. GO KK!
| Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by jasonsanctuary | [ Reply to This ]
  I can uderstand what you are saying here, not just about the barbies of the world but all the fake peple and well all the normal people doing what they think or shall i say what they have been told what is normal.

Peace.
| Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Kube | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem. I feel the same exact way when i walk around my school and i see everyone wears essentially the same style, its kinda creapy. Overall i think this poem is awsome but their are a few spots where it gets a bit wordy. Once again great write!

Selene
| Posted on 2007-10-19 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
  Exactly. [censored] the people who comform to the clothing and do anything to become popular and look like fortune, because their souls are darker than ares. I want you to do the favor for me and comment on labels, because it is very similar to what you wrote here on your poem.

I too love people who are dark. At least they are real. Their pain is real. Their life is real, and their beauty is not fake such like these other [censored]s that live around inside of this world. I agree with you 100%. I agree a bit with one of your commentors, it seems as if your poem is a bit of a lyric style, but that's okay too, because I inteded my poem Lables as the same. Kinda odd how that happened lol.

Anyhow. Screw people like her, they get their place inside of this world sooner or later. Remember their Barbi looks aren't forever.
| Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very good. Just like Edward Hammond said, it was very vivid and flowed very smoothly. Don't take this the wrong way, but you write better when you're angry :)

I'm not going to complain about the cursing. You know why? It seriously adds to the "vividness" of the entire piece.

I have two grammatical things to [censored] about, so bear with me:

Line 8: "wear" should be "wears."

Also, you might want to put this piece through a spell check with grammatical errors on, to fix the contractions and such. They somewhat tear me away from reading the piece, and I had to do that myself to read the piece. I'm a stickler for details...

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I'm going to consider this as lyrics to a song, just to let you know. The verses all have the same theme: that everyone absolutely has to bee popular, mindless clones. That's America nowofdays, isn't it?

You are so correct. Thank you for point this out.
This is a very dark piece, and quite frankly, I enjoyed it.

Have a good day,
Cirruculum (TK)
| Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Cirruculum | [ Reply to This ]
  It was vivid and I enjoyed the way the rhymes moved around, stanza to stanza, sometimes no rhyme at all.

It was dark, I think it would be awesome to see something like this expcept less dark. Not light, not fluffy, just less dark.
| Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Edward Hammond | [ Reply to This ]

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