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    dots Submission Name: Invisible Childdots
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    Author: allyn d.
    Elite Ratio:    5.25 - 6/4/10
    Words: 301
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       you might be saying: Wow, this is sort of emo...if you think that way, no problem; I agree.

    I still have this for the sake of remembering how my day - or even life - could still be right now, and how thankful I should be that it is not as despairing as that one day: the 14th of May, 2007.

    Yeah, maybe no one feels like this, maybe no one ever will (except me), but if anyone does, I can relate to him. And the last two stanzas are there to show there is still hope.

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    dotsInvisible Childdots
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    Ignored
    Rejected
    In no ways respected
    Alone
    Unshown

    That one person
    Made such a difference
    Made you appear
    Now that person is gone
    And so are you

    To think that can really happen
    To think it happens to you
    But it does;
    Every time.
    You seem to have gone invisible…

    You are only the moon, child
    You need someone to make you shine
    Sometimes you do shine
    Sometimes you don’t
    But no one really minds

    When you are there
    They merely use you
    They wouldn’t care if you disappeared.
    And you feel so rejected…
    So disrespected


    You are only another leaf in the wind
    You rustle past,
    Unnoticed
    They wouldn’t care if you had flown by
    Or perhaps tragically fallen along

    And soon you get used to people ignoring you
    Then you care no more, if they don’t see you
    Or so it seems.
    Because deep inside, you want recognition
    You pray for it day and night

    There are those short moments
    That you gain what you had waited for
    Still, it is what you needed
    And it helps you carry on
    But only until it lasts

    And you seem to wait forever
    For those precious moments
    And gradually people cease to see you
    And the only thing to stick on your side is the loneliness
    And the looks that have gone cold

    And somehow you carry on
    Cuz this you know for sure:
    When the exact time comes
    You will finally achieve that recognition alone
    And that one achievment will last forever

    Yes, you shall be the moon no more
    You will be a forever shining star
    And from fragile overlooked leaf, child
    You pass on to majestic tree
    And you will become visible once again.




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      I use to feel the exact same way, and sometimes I still feel like that... you arn't emo you're just passionate, like me ^_^! You care about things more than you should. You are going to be one of the few people who make a diffrence in this world. You just have to hold your head up high and not let all your emotions hang on the edge of your sleeve. This poem is one of my favorites by you!

    Way to go!
    Britt
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]


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