I agree to an extent about the flow of the poem, the rhyming was good, but even better was the meanings behind it all, life is so full of misery and torture that it makes the world very easy to misunderstand, and if you mean by slipping into the shadows - Dying - then of course, its going to be hard
I write a lot of this kind of poetry for some reason
I can understand everything else in the world but the fact that we will die and have no answers to the ending
we just float along in time hoping that theres something more to it, and the pain of living makes us want to find out if death is all that much worse.
great write, and I think youre pretty cute btw,
especially with that pink gangster bandanna ;)