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    dots Submission Name: Situation With NO Solutiondots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
    Total Views: 719
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1152



    Description:
       JUst thinking...Time flys by and you wake up morning and its amazing where you are, how things have fallen into place. Things change that"ll never change... Although the one thing that will never change for anyone that is our pasts and as much as we may dislike what we've done, what others have done to us in our pasts we need to stick together and get threw it. And reach the top like they think we cannot and prove those people wrong.


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    dotsSituation With NO Solutiondots
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    You not only put me in a horrible situation
    But you also gave me NO chance to survive.
    No matter my choices I was Dam'ed.

    And you ... YES! You made it all work out in this way.
    If I were to lye and get back to the sex abusive house

    You made it out to others as if I were the bad guy because I lied

    But I lied for my sake I had to make the choice that was best for me ...
    For it was obvious to myself that I no longer had parents looking out for my well-being.

    I knew you could not provide for me
    I knew you could not handle two children on an emotional level!

    And I had to take the abuse and suck up the pain for what it was.

    I had to accept that... it was either living in a box on the street...
    Or in a house with a roof over my head and a Step Father with no boundaries...

    I was given a situation with no solution!
    You... You, Mother Gave me This...

    This Past
    Its made me stronger
    Its made me more aware

    But it... You have also hurt Me!




    Submitted on 2007-10-17 17:13:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with the last comment in some senses, but it was good none the less. Looks like you have a half and half person, sometimes they make you feel special, sometimes they hurt you, its the same in a lot of people's cases. Good write. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      well i wont lie it was decent but you could change a lot of things, this almost seemed more like a short story than a poem, but to each his own-
    try to be more abstract with your writing so people have to try and figure it out and not just develop the meaning over the first read or so,
    not to say you did a bad job, or to criticize another writer like I am a pro, Im not.
    I just try to give feedback where I can
    good job, -Bill
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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