Description: my sexuality is fettered with soppy imaginings,mopped up by corny liasons!
k salve. -------------------------------------------
your hair
is so thick and
your feet move like ecstatic knomes.
your delicate mouth eats peanut butter in an admirable fashion
a manner i obsess over
and your character develops-
you ask 'do you feel like we've met before?'
and i bustle over this
whilst wiping the dew over my face
that displaces the arid nature
of lurid grasp..
..Lesprit descalier.
interpreting your claptrap animated walls
is placing my head under guillotine-
only pushing my wanton fingertips
my tiny mind gesticulates wildly
and is deserted
craving sweetness
I love this! Ecstatic knomes made me laugh as I was temporarily transported into my mind imagining little knomes scurrying about. But eventually I returned to finish reading. i was further seduced by the assonace in the second stanza; face , displaces, nature
The only line that leaves me puzzle is at the end I have no insight to what this wonky imbalance might be as far as it being crunchy it leaves me to wonder if you like crunchy things I love them personally. Anyway. Thanks for sharing.
peace
I did enjoy this read, although I can't say that I know what the piece is about. I like the style of the piece. I'm not too sure about the grammar in some places. Do you mean gnomes?
I do believe the piece could use maybe a little more fluidity, but I have some unorthodox ways myself.
Stay Original & Cutting Edge,
lol this is fantastic
so different than most of what I see on here
I feel the same way over this girl I met a few weeks ago, I just admire every little thing about her , but before I give you my life story
I have to say I liked this, lots of originality,
didnt all make sense but it made me lol.
I think that's the best and most original line I've read all day...
"your hair
is so thick and
your feet move like ecstatic knomes.
your delicate mouth eats peanut butter in an admirable fashion
a manner i obsess over
and your character develops-"
I love that as well...the attention to details like the eating of the peanut butter...I love things like this...it shows me that there are other people out there that pay attention to, and tend to immortalize, the strange, random little everyday actions of the person they are enamored of...
Submission Name: k salve.
