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    dots Submission Name: American Kill Vehicledots
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    Author: NoMartyr
    ASL Info:    18/M/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 29/60/51
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 186
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1866



    Description:
       It's missing a stanza or two, but I am impatient and put it up anyway


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    dotsAmerican Kill Vehicledots
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    Till the dead soil and watch the green grow
    Reap the said spoils of the poppy fields below
    Let's play man and kill god upon god upon god upon god upon god upon god upon

    We must keep moving forward
    We must keep moving forward
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    Watch the progress of the two sun set
    We must keep moving forward
    And check the receipt for another Buick SCUD

    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't fuck shit in neutral
    The machine doesn't fuck shit in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    Our Sunday best is in vestments of shrapnel
    Watch it clean through an ocean of petrol
    Devour temples and erect our chapel
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    We should burn the bodies so McDonald's has a lot
    Where it can sell its crack to the sand people
    The machine doesn't function in neutral
    Our Sunday best is investments of shrapnel
    Watch it clean through an ocean of petrol
    The machine doesn't function in neutral




    Submitted on 2007-10-18 01:01:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i.m not to sure i like
    "The machine doesn't function in neutral"
    being repeated,just my opinion, but you have got some other really great lines throughout the whole piece


    Our Sunday best is in vestments of shrapnel
    Watch it clean through an ocean of petrol

    i liked this one best of all.
    take care
    gmc

    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      I could see this as a song...an all out rant against everything...

    It just seems so angry, which is good...because it works that way.

    I like it.

    "We should burn the bodies so McDonald's has a lot
    Where it can sell its crack to the sand people"

    After this, I almost expected a poke at Wal-mart as well...maybe that's one of the missing stanzas.
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]



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