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    dots Submission Name: How Do You Tell Who Your Friends Rdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 387
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Venting
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       My Love does all he can for those whom ask. Even when his time is limited even when his things need to be done and he is the only one that can get these errands finished. He put others before himself and he is taken advantaged for it. And its simply a DAM Shame this is how good people become bitter and sour, just a few people can easily ruin something good somthing great for the rest us!


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    dotsHow Do You Tell Who Your Friends Rdots
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    We do our best to follow our dreams,
    To do the things we have a passion for.

    And yes, throughout these times of trial...
    As we pursue our passions things may get in our way,
    we may have hurdles to jump and obstacles to overcome

    And determining our strength, our will to go on, and our will to see our dreams to succeed.

    We can, and will overcome,
    We will come out on top!

    Although I must admit

    ~It's Hard~

    Seeing My Lover's dream possibly fail on account of others stupidity of others incompetence.

    It literally breaks my heart into TWO!


    And even more than their stupidity and incompetence that gets in My Lover's way.

    Is those whom consider him as a friend.
    Those whom say they'd do just as he would for him; that which he has done for them.

    Actions Speak Lounder Than Words


    These friends take advantage of his time
    Use him for only when they need him
    Only calling when they need something.
    And yet again there is more to this!

    Not only do these "So Called" friends USE him,
    they show My Lover no gratitude no appreciation for his time he has spent helping them.

    Meanwhile this time needs to be spent on his dream that may just be in ruins by others and his "So Called" friends.

    For I know those who should see this for what it is, Will Not
    And probably will never see just how much My Lover will give and give until nothing is left of him,

    For his "So Called" friends have drained him.
    Nothing is left, nothing but bitterness.

    From those whom have damaged the possibility of his dream succeeding and ALL from those "So called" friends using him and Not Once saying a simple polite "Thank You"






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    "Actions Speak Louder Than Words"

    This is one of the truest phrases ever said, my husbands tag line on most of his profiles is
    " Show me motherF*(^*(&^"r"

    Because as you have described very well here people take advantage of strong people with huge hearts,
    Until they are weak alone and drained,

    Well done I hope they don't take what is him with what they continue to take and take from him as well.
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      I say he should find some new friends, they all sound like ****s, no offence. Nice write, best start looking at them all, been away for god knows how long
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      And yes, throughout these times of trial...

    i question your use of ellipses here at the end of this line. my understand of ellipses is that the idea it follows is sposed to be one that continues and therefore the ellipses symbolise the unending quality of the thought. this doesnt seem to be the case of this line which continues in idea on to the following lines...


    Actions Speak [Lounder] Than Words = louder



    sometimes pieces like this need to be written. sometimes one needs to release their frustrations and if words are the way you do that then that is good.
    i find myself in a slghtly similar boat tonight. i had 7 teenage girls over for the night for a birthday party. 2 of the girls arrived at 12pm yesterday and left at 2pm today and i fed them meals and such that i hadnt planned on having to and when their father picked them up he didnt say anything... im feeling a little slacked off but then i am exhausted which prolly isnt helping.

    i question how the words in the bold and italics got to be there. was there a specific criteria to fit to be in bold or italics? a meaning you wanted to get across? a comon bond?

    dont let unappreciative people put you off. your lover will have to pick who he helps better if it is thanks he requires i guess...
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting take on "friends"
    I know many people like this,
    who pretend to be best buddies for the longest time, and ask for all kinds of favors, but when the friendship starts to fall apart because the other person was only using them
    it leaves a devastating loss to the friend who thought so highly of this person
    its a terrible situation
    I cant stand people like that

    I liked it, -Bill
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love you........Come join writers cafe and look for Raven Of Sincerity
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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