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    dots Submission Name: War in My Heartdots

    Author: Gemzz
    ASL Info:    17/F/Manila, Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 0/2/3
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/BrokenHeart
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       people are afraid of showing what they really feel with their true love

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    dotsWar in My Heartdots

    The Darkness of the night
    Lingers in my mind
    And i'm lying here in my sanctuary
    Never minding solitary

    My mind is suffused by illusions
    Illusions of my one and only
    The one that can never be mine
    How i wish i was oblivious

    How could i be so obnoxious
    Of my own emotions
    How could i be a coward
    In the war in my heart

    Submitted on 2007-10-18 05:08:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Pieces of this are so wrenching and very vivid of what you are trying to convey.

    If you seek help tightening this a bit...let me know and I will give you a detailed critique.

    How could I be so obnoxious
    of my own emotions.
    How could I be a coward,
    in the war of my heart.

    So much longing and no where for it to go.

    This write does convey a broken heart.


    | Posted on 2014-05-18 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]

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