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    dots Submission Name: Nervous.dots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    17/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.18 - 320/315/123
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 112
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 766



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    dotsNervous.dots
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    can you feel my hand
    trace your jawline
    can you feel my hand
    nails rake your back
    nervous yet?

    i smile through our kiss
    you look almost intangible
    i smile through our kiss
    i know whos in charge
    nervous yet?

    ashamed of us
    or more of me
    ashamed of us
    but less of you
    nervous yet?

    i cant lie
    no i really cant
    i cant lie
    i did love you
    nervous yet?

    you looked so happy
    I coulda cried
    you looked so happy
    in the back of a cop car
    nervous yet?

    I didnt expect
    sex to be so boring
    i didnt expect
    to feel so numb
    nervous.




    Submitted on 2007-10-18 09:10:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes, my Precious Girl. Chocolates and icecreams are better than sex. now you know the grown-ups' secret!!!
    don't sell yourself short...eat a chocolate bonbon instead!!!


    i love you and miss you,
    with all my heart,
    Momma
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      I completely agree with how you feel

    sex is boring ;)

    just kidding, but I know that when you find someone you really like and they are just playing you because they want sex, it ruins everything, even if you stay together.
    first loves and romances are hard to find these days when the world is filled with nothing more than trivial pursuits and lost meanings of love

    good job on this, and keep writing,
    -Bill
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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