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    dots Submission Name: Otheringdots
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    Author: Universal
    ASL Info:    17/f/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 46/48/35
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 815
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    Bytes: 981



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    dotsOtheringdots
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    I want a place in mind/ a noble space/ where I can’t find this syllogism/ the forced logic of our language and ethics.

    A landscape undefined/ by the binary oppositions of our tounges/ but one we’ve wrought through the most weak and the most mild entreaties/ the love and the hope we hold for an ideal of peace.

    A place where we are not “other”/ the interlocutor to your “I”/ but together as one/ a mass organism that has spun/ this new world order.

    We scream “this is not a place of continental philosophy”

    But perhaps we know our own fallacy/ humanities inadequacy/ to define outside the ego.

    My qualia’s a hip rope to difference of opinion irreconcilable with the untruth of the crowd

    Thus we are all the grand-auter/ living with a capital O hung around our necks/ like a noose to a dream much better than ourselves/ the unattainable peace of a land without violence




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      i feel i have to say something about this but i'm coming up with a complete blank. i enjoyed this. made me think. made me question myself and come up with answers. made me curious and small in this grand scheme of things. yeah.

    your layout here is very lyrical. using "/" certainly made this read out like song-lyrics. but conscious lyrics. not just stupid crap that you hear on the top 40, complaining or idealising... whatever.

    well, now.
    just some passing thoughts.
    yup.
    | Posted on 2008-12-20 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      Perhaps it's just the mood that I am in, but this reminds me of a song...It's very interesting...


    We scream “this is not a place of continental philosophy”

    I like it
    | Posted on 2007-10-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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