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    dots Submission Name: Story outline (SPOILER WARNING)dots

    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 490
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       This is a kind of outline to my story idea, interested to see what you think. Be warned, this contains spoilers

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    dotsStory outline (SPOILER WARNING)dots

    Book One:
    When the Warplord discovers the Chosen One, he attempts to turn him to help him conquer the universe. Rescued by the allies, he is thrust into a Demonic War being fought. When the demons are defeated, and having overthrown the warlord known as "The Collector" he returns to fight the Warplord, revealing the prophecy's fulfillment.

    Book Two:
    Having returned to Earth, the hero discovers that two "spirits" called The Dark One and El-Diablo are chasing the fabled "Orb of Nightmares". Fighting them, he also faces "The Collector" again, gaining the Sword of Ages from him. Turning to the dark side because of a curse, he "dies", forcing the allies to follow him. But, a new force is gathering to attack.

    Book Three:
    Having visited the Great Ones, the allies discover an army of Pure Demons, led by the alien Baxars, a rogue Great One and the Dark Alliance, are attacking. Forced to chase them through the universe, they fight at Sarn Gebir. With one last battle, the hero is feared dead, and the Dark Alliance have vanished...but are gathering an army afresh. First appearance of Bane.

    Thirty years pass:
    Bane helps both sides, and the hero marries and has a child.

    Book Four:
    The Dark Alliance return with a fresh Pure Demon army and a second fallen Great One, in order to find the Orb of Nightmares. Finally destroyed in a big battle, the allies are forced into a new fight when an ancient entity destroys entire star systems as revenge for an ancient wrong. Forced to confront him when friends are kidnapped, a friend's sacrifice ultimately destroyed him. Nearly giving up, the hero ultimately decided to train other psychics in preparation for a new threat gathering in the northern realms....

    Book Five:
    When the Harvesters emerge from their northern empire, they cut an unstoppable path through the allied worlds. When the inhabitants of the world Orion intervene and turn the tide. Its discovered that a reborn Warplord leads this invasion, but is ultimately defeated, but now the real evil has arrived....When a mysterious creature is found gathering a demon army, the allies go to confront him. The "Dark Herald" reveals that Bane and his dark master have arrived, before kidnapping the hero. Its then revealed that Bane is in fact the hero's SUPPOSEDLY dead friend, and now he has a new demon army is ready to strike.....

    Book Six:
    As the hero is rescued from Bane's fortress, the attack begins. As the armies suffer heavy losses, the allies realise they must kill Bane to end the war. They lay a trap, drawing the army guarding the fortress away to leave the hero to fight Bane alone. However, the allies are the ones trapped: as an army far bigger than they expected head into battle with the allies, the hero must now defeat a powerful enemy....and his master still waits to strike.....

    Submitted on 2007-10-19 10:40:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well i'm sure you already know what i think of the story.

    i am glad to hear that the hero marries and has a child....a little romance in the midst of all these wars is a good thing...lighten the mood a bit.

    i am very curious as to what the orb of nightmares is...

    will keep reading.

    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]

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