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    dots Submission Name: Love, lies and hatreddots
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    Author: VampireMaiden
    ASL Info:    15, Female, Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 23/31/29
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 110
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 952



    Description:
       I really don't know, it came to me out of the top of my head.... but it DOES have meaning.


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    dotsLove, lies and hatreddots
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    Oh, how you entangle me in your web of love
    lies
    and hatred

    Even though I am trapped, I feel free
    you caress me as I lay still,
    glued to your love
    lies
    and hatred

    I see light and day, and wish to to see it with
    you
    I want to take your hand and lay it in mine
    all through love
    lies
    and hatred

    Hold me, please, hold me dear,
    say something strong, something cruel something
    at all
    tell me of your love
    lies
    and hatred

    Strike me if I'm wrong but you care for me still
    even with my tears you wish for a smile
    and even with your scowl you show love
    lies
    and hatred

    Give me anything
    anything

    your love
    lies
    and hatred




    Submitted on 2007-10-20 10:31:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love that, especially the repetition of the title and how it's wound throughout the whole thing.
    Sort of sad, but very pretty.
    I'd critique this to make a better comment, but I wouldn't change anything.


    Beautifully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]



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