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    dots Submission Name: C.R.E.E.P.Y.dots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/I am dead inside
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    C.R.E.E.P.Y.

    CHRISTINA REMEMBERS EVERYTHING ENDING PERMANENTLY YESTERDAY


    i dont remember saying bye to you. i only remember what they tell me. i remember crying. i remember trying to get over you...

    i remember gagging as he kissed me, flinching when he touched me, cringing as he climbs over me, and tensing right before he enters me.

    i remember him telling me how tight i was and i said i know. i remember him moving so fast. i remember how much it hurt but i wouldnt make him stop.

    i remember closing my eyes and seeing your face. i remember trying to get over you.

    i remember him crying out right before he falls and moving out of the way so he wont land on me. i remember dressing and wanting to leave.

    i remember him telling me he loves me...

    i remember repeating the words as the first lie i tell him. i remember hating him, myself, you. wanting you there. but your not.

    i remember trying to get over you.


    meaningless memories

    "i love you"
    "you give me hope"
    "its over"
    "i hate you"
    "im sorry"




    Submitted on 2007-10-20 13:36:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have some hard hitting and very emotional pieces that reflect a lot of your life pain and you are very brave for always sharing.

    Love to you girl!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good in the way that i found it simple and beautiful. some people try too hard and it ALWAYS turns me off. this seemed like it was very natural.
    | Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my god...

    Amazing...absolutely amazing.

    I love this beyond comprehension.

    I thought that this feeling...this disgust with yourself and everyone else because of the love and heartache of someone else was indescribable...but you put it into beautiful, heart wrenching form, and it's hard to breath as I read and re-read it.

    Thank you so much for sharing this.

    It is perfect.
    | Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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