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    dots Submission Name: Staydots

    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Well...I'm not really sure about this. It came to me in my english lecture and is written in the margins of my book next to Gerard Manley Hopkin's "Carrion Comfort". I don't know where it came from, but it has been the only burst of inspirtation I've had in a long while...so I'm not complaining. I'm not sure, so let me know what you think. I almost feel like I could divide it into two different poems, but...I'll stop rambling.

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    Don't leave me...please.
    Don't go away.
    I don't know how
    to make you stay.

    I love you, but
    I turn around
    and you disappear
    without a sound.

    I see you there
    across the room.
    Did you leave me,
    or did I leave you?

    Was I the one
    who let you down?
    After all...
    I turned around.

    Forgive me...please.
    Just don't go.
    Can't you see
    I love you so?

    Submitted on 2007-10-20 14:36:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm. not so sure i see two seperate poems here. i mean this is pretty concise and to the point. about as straightforward as a piece of poetry could be.
    confused,guilty feelings mixed with a shot of paranoia.on the rocks.
    | Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]

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