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Author: manwithnoname
ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
Elite Ratio:    5.84 - 314 /278 /117
Words: 50
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I just came up with this in my head while I was at work this evening.


One day I decided to amuse myself
By reading the annals of Father Time.

The longer I read, however,
The more numerous they became.

I soon grew tired of this game.

Fed up, I turned to the very last page,
And saw myself looking at myself

Submitted on 2007-10-20 20:23:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A superbly written poem with wordplay. A poem is like a prism bending rays of light. Up is down and down is up. Poem possesses twists and contradictions. I enjoy reading this. keep sharing.

| Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
  I think the concept of looking at one's self infinitely is interesting. Reminds me a German story I read," Es steht Geschrieben", where the protagonist found a book which reflected his life. When the protagonist turned to the last page of the book, he read, :"the protagonist turned to the last page of the book".

Of course, while you read history will keep growing, as time is passing. The end of the book, I think, represents the current moment.

IMO, the introductory "One day" is superfluous, and could be done away with.

Finally, the absence of the final . is a nice touch.
| Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by albery rinash | [ Reply to This ]

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