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    dots Submission Name: Infinitelydots
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    Author: manwithnoname
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    5.84 - 314/278/117
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I just came up with this in my head while I was at work this evening.


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    dotsInfinitelydots
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    One day I decided to amuse myself
    By reading the annals of Father Time.

    The longer I read, however,
    The more numerous they became.

    I soon grew tired of this game.

    Fed up, I turned to the very last page,
    And saw myself looking at myself
    Infinitely




    Submitted on 2007-10-20 20:23:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A superbly written poem with wordplay. A poem is like a prism bending rays of light. Up is down and down is up. Poem possesses twists and contradictions. I enjoy reading this. keep sharing.


    FireFly747
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the concept of looking at one's self infinitely is interesting. Reminds me a German story I read," Es steht Geschrieben", where the protagonist found a book which reflected his life. When the protagonist turned to the last page of the book, he read, :"the protagonist turned to the last page of the book".

    Of course, while you read history will keep growing, as time is passing. The end of the book, I think, represents the current moment.

    IMO, the introductory "One day" is superfluous, and could be done away with.

    Finally, the absence of the final . is a nice touch.
    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by albery rinash | [ Reply to This ]


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