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felt my heart...

Author: justkillme08
ASL Info:    18/F/MA
Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97 /170 /124
Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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felt my heart...


I felt my heart beating,

I've yet to feel taht in a while,

I really dont understand it,

My mind is going wild,

Why should i care anymore,

Why should i like you,

I feel your just gunna fuck me over,

and lie to me.

I dont want no more heartache,

I dont want no more pain,

I just want someone to make me happy,

and be there for me each and every day!

Submitted on 2007-10-21 10:28:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  very honest I like how you express your self so freely...
very nice poetry keep it honest

p.s (tath) in scened line should be (that) and gunna should be ganna I guess you missed it.... happened with me every single time !!
| Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]

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