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    dots Submission Name: felt my heart...dots
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    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsfelt my heart...dots
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    10*19*07---Poem


    I felt my heart beating,

    I've yet to feel taht in a while,

    I really dont understand it,

    My mind is going wild,

    Why should i care anymore,

    Why should i like you,

    I feel your just gunna fuck me over,

    and lie to me.

    I dont want no more heartache,

    I dont want no more pain,

    I just want someone to make me happy,

    and be there for me each and every day!





    Submitted on 2007-10-21 10:28:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very honest I like how you express your self so freely...
    very nice poetry keep it honest


    p.s (tath) in scened line should be (that) and gunna should be ganna I guess you missed it.... happened with me every single time !!
    | Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]


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