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    dots Submission Name: I've Never Danced Like Thisdots
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    Author: Flowerinbloom
    ASL Info:    22/M/Earth (I think)
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 700/559/123
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 961
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Just trying to overcome my rustiness. Tell me what you think.


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    dotsI've Never Danced Like Thisdots
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    I've never danced like this,
    with a blindfold over my eyes,
    trusting you to tell me where to step,
    my palms nested in yours.
    I'm so nervous I'm sweating
    but you dont seem to mind.
    Gently we're swaying,
    Tchikovsky's Symphonie Pathique playing,
    my heart pumping
    but slowly now,
    it's arrested with time.
    I rest my head on your shoulders,
    my soul on your cheek.
    Be careful with it,
    it's been torn before
    but you know how fragile it is
    and you wouldn't hurt me.
    You're soft to the touch
    and you handle me with care.
    It's hard to believe
    it all started with a kiss.
    With my hands in yours
    I've never danced like this.




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      Sounds like the blossoming of trust following a mere moment of innocent lust. Dance on my friend, let the music sweep you and she where it will.
    | Posted on 2008-01-04 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sweet I absolutely love this. Oh this has the same romantic effect on me like a candle lit dinner on the pier. Oh love it. Now you got me all misty eyed.

    Correy
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by AnotherNobody | [ Reply to This ]
      Jermaine,
    rusty from what? honey, this is beautiful.
    You managed to sweep me off my feet and enjoy every minute of it.

    "I rest my head on your shoulders,
    my soul on your cheek.
    Be careful with it,
    it's been torn before
    but you know how fragile it is
    and you wouldn't hurt me"

    This absolutely sends me over the edge. That is possibly the sweetest thing to be said to someone.
    This is a love poem ~ a love song, sung in the most perfect key.
    Well written and goes in my faves
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-11-09 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww That's so sweet. I hate love, but I love this. (I don't know... there's something wrong with me).
    Emotion hangs from every well-written line. The descriptions are too perfect. Really made me feel like I was there... holding onto both of you and dancing as a third wheel should... and enjoying every second of it!!
    Haha Sorry if I've slapped the romance right out of this. I just want to dance....

    Very beautifully done, friend. No rust at all.
    I love it.


    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      I would read this as a metaphor for love. This one goes in my favorites for its sweet romantic nature and for the personal memories it brought back to my mind. Well done! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot, it's so sweet. the emotion in it was good. the structure could use a little work and i feel like there should be more. but i liked it well done. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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