is screaming fuck you.
is screaming fuck me.
and i'm stuck between the two
like a wasp between
the window panes.
try and grab me and i swear
it might kill me
it would feel good to hurt you.
| So glad I looked at some of your other things than just the one I read........ This is great.|
...Not really anything else to say that hasn't been said already.
...The only thing I can think of is that last line. I kind of get stuck on it. Maybe change "It would" to "It'd." It flows a bit better... Or maybe it's just me (likely).
|| Posted on 2007-10-29 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ] || This is the best piece of Satire on belligerency I have ever read. A great exposure of wickedness which entraps the very being of a person. This piece exposes the futility of causing harm to something that can not be harmed ; thus, the endeavor of doing so has no purpose of fruition. The victim is trapped in a nether-nether world where purpose can have no hope of accomplishment. This piece also reminds me of the terrible sense of debillity which comes through addiction to any mind destroying substance.||| Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ] || haha what a random thought indeed.|
the harsh honesty of the whole idea is brilliant. i dont think ive read anything as blatant as this in the longest time.
and yes... this is an interesting place to be.
the mind screaming fvck you could be taken a number of ways but im taking it as a its over/[censored] kinda statement and yet it is contrasted with the second fvck me which is one of needing and longing no matter what a fvcker he is to you...
hence the wasp stuck between the two panes of glass [which is a brilliant image here]
some days it would be nice to hurt people. i know that sounds cruel but its true... some days people deserve to be hurt the way they have hurt us [though hopefully our logic on this issue has been swayed before we actually make any steps in the actioning of the hurt]
|| Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ] |