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Whenever I feel

Author: LadyMerlina
ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
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Words: 84
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Whenever I feel

I’m sick of faking a smile.
I’m sick of making it seem worthwhile.
I’d like to show you the scars,
And show you how it’s gone too far.

I wish you could
smell the rancid scent, I smell.
Taste the acid taste I taste.
I want you to feel that crick in my neck
That reminds me everything’s gone to hell.

I want you to know how I feel,
That this is how I get,
Whenever I feel myself.

Submitted on 2007-10-21 15:25:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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