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    dots Submission Name: Whenever I feeldots
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    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWhenever I feeldots
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    Iím sick of faking a smile.
    Iím sick of making it seem worthwhile.
    Iíd like to show you the scars,
    And show you how itís gone too far.

    I wish you could
    smell the rancid scent, I smell.
    Taste the acid taste I taste.
    I want you to feel that crick in my neck
    That reminds me everythingís gone to hell.

    I want you to know how I feel,
    That this is how I get,
    Whenever I feel myself.





    Submitted on 2007-10-21 15:25:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it...

    I know how you feel as well...

    It sucks sometimes, huh?
    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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