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    dots Submission Name: There's Always Something Wrongdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 548
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Hard to resist temptation...

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    dotsThere's Always Something Wrongdots

    There's something about this that calls out to me
    In a voice that I can not resist
    But I think there's something important in the shadows
    Something I seem to have missed
    I'm not sure what these things are trying to say
    But I know that it's got to be about you
    You're something that I never planned for
    And I don't know what that means I should do
    I've always held back for a reason
    I almost lost myself before
    But you've broken through my walls
    And shaken me to my core

    But there's always something wrong
    A reason why this can't be
    We've lost too much and can't take a chance
    On a thing like you and me
    There's always something wrong
    But I think it could be made right
    I can be a reason to wake
    And you could get me through the night

    You've somehow made it inside
    And you know things that I refuse to share
    And I'm trying to be calm about this
    And not show you how much I care
    I don't need to lose my heart
    When I just managed to find it again
    I don't need to surrender my soul to you
    I don't need to let you in
    But if the unspeakable happens, and we decide to explore
    Instead of just running away
    Know that I'll let you have my heart,
    But only if you promise to stay

    But there's always something wrong
    A reason why we won't last
    Too many things have come and gone
    In our individual pasts
    There's always something wrong
    And reason why it will end
    Why not just give it a chance
    And see how it begins?

    Submitted on 2007-10-21 17:05:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have been there before and I will be there again I am afraid. This was very moving and you expressed yourself quite well.
    Great write!! thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this piece is a patchwork of major contradictions Raivn. It once again speaks of your fear to take a chance and your burning desire to do just that. Internal conflict to beat the band.
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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