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    dots Submission Name: Diving Into Self-Destructiondots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1729



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    dotsDiving Into Self-Destructiondots
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    I know better than to do this
    To let my heart get involved
    You're a puzzle missing a few pieces
    A mystery that can't be solved
    I knew better than to kiss you
    To let your lips touch mine
    I should have never touched you
    I should not have crossed that line
    I know better than to want you
    To ache to have you near
    And despite all this knowledge inside me
    I'm reliving all my worst fears

    I'm diving into my self-destruction
    Leaving my common sense behind
    Can't know where this path can lead
    Or imagine what I can find
    I'm diving into my self-destruction
    I'm frolicking in the pain
    Don't know why I made this choice
    I must be going insane

    I know I'm more intelligent than I seem
    But I'm still doing this again
    I know you'll never really feel the same,
    But man, do I love to win
    It would be okay if I could keep my heart out of it
    Put all romantic feelings aside
    But just like you, I wear my heart on my sleeve
    Instead of keeping it locked inside
    So, it seems I'm going to take that leap again
    Regardless of whether I fall
    And I'll try not to lose my head
    I'll try not to care at all

    I'm diving into my self-destruction
    I hope this time, it's deep
    I might as well take this chance
    You might be someone to keep
    I'm diving into my self-destruction
    My thoughts are getting hazy
    I knew better than to hope for anything
    I must have finally gone crazy.




    Submitted on 2007-10-21 17:07:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Call me stupid, but I think I could relate to this, at least half-way through I can. But who can't? We all have someone we want... and a lot of us will never have that person we want oh so much.

    I liked it. I think it might hit my favorites... maybe. Let me read it a few times, not much gets on my favorites.

    All I can say to work on is..

    Psht.

    I don't know, I actually don't see anything wrong.

    Good work.
    ~Mowsy
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by MowsysWrath | [ Reply to This ]
      oh yeah, it was pretty cool, hehe
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, love hurts -- but as john lennon said -- time wounds all heals, right?
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      The chances that we choose to never take are often the ones that would have paid off in spades. At least you know going in what is to be expected.

    How have you been my friend, I miss our communications.
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, and you said my poem was sad like...
    its a really good poem
    i think me and you are thinking the same way recently, i have just put some new lyrics on mine,
    (plz read, i love ur comments!)

    i like this part,

    "I know better than to want you
    To ache to have you near
    And despite all this knowledge inside me
    I'm reliving all my worst fears"

    i really know how that feels like, i had a chance and i blew it and there is no going back, no backspace key in reality(although that would be nice, so would delete)

    i also like

    "I'm diving into my self-destruction
    My thoughts are getting hazy
    I knew better than to hope for anything
    I must have finally gone crazy."

    the second to last line .....perfect for how i feel at the moment

    over all i love your piece, it is great!
    ^-^

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]


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