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Author: save me
ASL Info:    19/F
Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26 /51 /53
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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unable to move,
it's as if i'm glued to the spot,
trying to reach out,
but i can't,
my mind is too far gone,

staring down at my body,
so tender, so limp,
watching as the blood oozes.
from the pinkish flesh,
i now call my wrists,

lying on the bathroom floor,
watching a world spin in my head,
the walls closing in,
trapped, practically dead,

a banging in my head,
taking me away fast,
close to being able to feel...
no pain, nothing,

i slip away slowly,
my mind going blank,
corners of my mind,
now completely black,

i'm free of all pain,
in peace as it is,
but they took me to a hospital,
and now, i have to live.

Submitted on 2007-10-21 21:03:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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