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    dots Submission Name: unlucky.dots
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    Author: save me
    ASL Info:    16/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 21/39/36
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 105
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    Bytes: 848



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    unable to move,
    it's as if i'm glued to the spot,
    trying to reach out,
    but i can't,
    my mind is too far gone,

    staring down at my body,
    so tender, so limp,
    watching as the blood oozes.
    from the pinkish flesh,
    i now call my wrists,

    lying on the bathroom floor,
    watching a world spin in my head,
    the walls closing in,
    trapped, practically dead,

    a banging in my head,
    taking me away fast,
    close to being able to feel...
    no pain, nothing,

    i slip away slowly,
    my mind going blank,
    corners of my mind,
    now completely black,

    i'm free of all pain,
    in peace as it is,
    but they took me to a hospital,
    and now, i have to live.




    Submitted on 2007-10-21 21:03:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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