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    dots Submission Name: Thank You For The Supportdots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 754
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 751



    Description:
       I love anyone who showed me a true love, Thank you Poe.....


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    dotsThank You For The Supportdots
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    Who was looking at who,
    I almost left it to late for those around me and myself,
    I offered you peace until I nearly stepped into hell,
    You we're laughing,
    I was annoyed,
    Utter rejection for nothing more than your joy,
    You thought I was dense,
    You think that I'm blind,
    Well here I am again,
    I know I am alive,

    From here I forgive and forget,
    But we can't remain friends,
    If I knew you had a conscience maybe we could try again,
    Too late now,
    But peace to you all the same,
    This was my life and the life of many others,
    No fucking game.
    Love to all those who helped me,
    Come to me let me know your name.




    Submitted on 2007-10-22 03:29:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was alright -- but i missed the point, hehe.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow man, this was one powerful kiss-off piece. Have you found yourself done wrong by others on this site. I can't say with impunity that I always understand the workings of this site and I too am often mildly insulted by comments or more importantly the lack of them. I can only hope that I have never caused you a moment's grief.

    Hang in there bro...you have a gift...don't lose it.
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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