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    dots Submission Name: Note to selfdots

    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    In my own sight I see what I can live
    A thought or a dream is my perfect life
    Imagine what is there to take
    Our mind can make us great
    That same mind can kill us
    Drift away with me
    Find that place where we both can love.

    This rock looks good to crawl under
    I might just stay here for awhile
    See what happens
    Itís nice and dark and no one will find me here
    No one will bother me
    They wonít even see me
    That would be nice.

    I donít like to think about tomorrow
    But next year will be different
    Thatís when itíll all make sense
    Iím sure of it
    But I must change tomorrow to change the years
    Things just donít fall into place
    I must push them.

    Who can help me today?
    I have guidance
    Let me think about it for awhile.

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