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    dots Submission Name: Idots
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    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is a bit of a ryme and a peom, enjoy


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    dotsIdots
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    Iím above the world looking at this disturbing view
    I see many win but I see even more loose
    Do you see the clues? I see them all around you!
    I see the blood; others see the love
    A normal family or shit that I just never can be
    Explain to me who gives me this power of reality
    Whoís in my mind that keeps telling me?
    Giving me these feelings that others only read about
    Dream about
    Leave me alone is all I can shout out!
    Hatred is a makeshift weapon I create with no thought
    My insanity strikes me down where I lay
    An apple a day keeps the doctor away
    But whoís going to keep the demons from keeping my angels at bay?
    I can see the light of day but it doesnít shine when Iím dark
    My own thoughts laugh at me when I start to feel love
    This world has shown me enough but I just canít get enough
    Give me more destruction show me how bad you really are
    You canít break my sprit
    Is this how we must live?
    Well I guess Iíll just have to out live it.




    Submitted on 2007-10-22 06:26:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i cant explain how i felt. i think it would be better without the "[censored]" at the beggining, but thats just me. gj though.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]
      You reminded me of myself in that I argue things over in my brain before resolving to "guess Iíll just have to out live it." I think you have omitted a word or have a typo with "I normal family" in line 5 and in the 4th line from the end with "destruction so me how bad." You kept my interest throughout! Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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