and I want
To be enabled to
and I need
Instead I plead
and I bleed.
To yearn for my affection:
| This is like a Jonah in a whale's belly. He was caught between a rock and a hard place until he realised there was nothing to do except to smile (pray).|
I think if you changed the word (affection) to that of (deflection) it would portray the idea of resolution.
|| Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ] || Yeah, I gave this one a few read-throughs. I'm with Big Bill on this one. The forming of the line breaks and the placement of punctuation (which I trust is on purpose?) gives me an interesting experience as I finish up and 'just smile' too. Very nice.||| Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by keitherton | [ Reply to This ] || I Really like this|
This short but powerful write describes the urgency of someone to find a True Friend who will be their to Help them move forward
I too Long for this person to come into my life
Maybe someday they will but to tell you the truth even if I dont find them I will always have the Love of The Truest Friends I will ever have
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
|| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] || wow interesting style|
I like how it makes you stop with the punctuation and the whatknots ;P
but I understand it
I liked it.
|| Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ] |