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I conquer
I long and I want To be enabled to but can’t, I believe and I need Instead I plead and I bleed. To yearn for my affection: just smile. |
Submitted on 2007-10-22 09:48:06 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| This is like a Jonah in a whale's belly. He was caught between a rock and a hard place until he realised there was nothing to do except to smile (pray). I think if you changed the word (affection) to that of (deflection) it would portray the idea of resolution. | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ] | Yeah, I gave this one a few read-throughs. I'm with Big Bill on this one. The forming of the line breaks and the placement of punctuation (which I trust is on purpose?) gives me an interesting experience as I finish up and 'just smile' too. Very nice. | | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by keitherton | [ Reply to This ] | I Really like this | This short but powerful write describes the urgency of someone to find a True Friend who will be their to Help them move forward I too Long for this person to come into my life Maybe someday they will but to tell you the truth even if I dont find them I will always have the Love of The Truest Friends I will ever have My Family God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | wow interesting style | I like how it makes you stop with the punctuation and the whatknots ;P but I understand it just smile  I liked it. bill | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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