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I conquer

Author: Polydectes
ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154 /85 /38
Words: 34
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I conquer

I long
and I want
To be enabled to
but can’t,
I believe
and I need
Instead I plead
and I bleed.
To yearn for my affection:
just smile.

Submitted on 2007-10-22 09:48:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is like a Jonah in a whale's belly. He was caught between a rock and a hard place until he realised there was nothing to do except to smile (pray).
I think if you changed the word (affection) to that of (deflection) it would portray the idea of resolution.
| Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah, I gave this one a few read-throughs. I'm with Big Bill on this one. The forming of the line breaks and the placement of punctuation (which I trust is on purpose?) gives me an interesting experience as I finish up and 'just smile' too. Very nice.
| Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by keitherton | [ Reply to This ]
  I Really like this
This short but powerful write describes the urgency of someone to find a True Friend who will be their to Help them move forward
I too Long for this person to come into my life
Maybe someday they will but to tell you the truth even if I dont find them I will always have the Love of The Truest Friends I will ever have
My Family
God Bless
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  wow interesting style

I like how it makes you stop with the punctuation and the whatknots ;P
but I understand it
just smile
I liked it.

| Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]

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