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    dots Submission Name: I conquer dots

    Author: Polydectes
    ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154/85/38
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI conquer dots

    I long
    and I want
    To be enabled to
    but canít,
    I believe
    and I need
    Instead I plead
    and I bleed.
    To yearn for my affection:
    just smile.

    Submitted on 2007-10-22 09:48:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is like a Jonah in a whale's belly. He was caught between a rock and a hard place until he realised there was nothing to do except to smile (pray).
    I think if you changed the word (affection) to that of (deflection) it would portray the idea of resolution.
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I gave this one a few read-throughs. I'm with Big Bill on this one. The forming of the line breaks and the placement of punctuation (which I trust is on purpose?) gives me an interesting experience as I finish up and 'just smile' too. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by keitherton | [ Reply to This ]
      I Really like this
    This short but powerful write describes the urgency of someone to find a True Friend who will be their to Help them move forward
    I too Long for this person to come into my life
    Maybe someday they will but to tell you the truth even if I dont find them I will always have the Love of The Truest Friends I will ever have
    My Family
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      wow interesting style

    I like how it makes you stop with the punctuation and the whatknots ;P
    but I understand it
    just smile
    I liked it.

    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]

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