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    dots Submission Name: Kiss Me My Darlingdots
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    Author: Flowerinbloom
    ASL Info:    22/M/Earth (I think)
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 700/559/123
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 876
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 419



    Description:
       just a little thing i was playing around with. there are no punctuatons really just wanted something a little more freeflow. tell me what you think


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    dotsKiss Me My Darlingdots
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    Kiss me my darling
    Leave your essence on my lips
    Trace my skin with your love prints
    Leaving Cupid's mark upon my body

    Hug me my darling
    Let me swim in your arms
    Lost in your stare
    Saved by the hero in you

    Hold me my darling
    Let me tremble under your touch
    Shake with your love
    My heart races with thoughts of you




    Submitted on 2007-10-22 15:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short and sweet, very nice. You create lovely imagery. Ive always admired that about you.

    Correy
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by AnotherNobody | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. It's not cliché and it's not overly sexual. I like the sublety of the piece. I like the language and the flow. i really can't see anything I would suggest changing. I love the line "Trace my skin with your love prints"
    Very nice work!

    Nicely
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      "Saved by the hero in you"

    I want to cry so badly now, but too much medication is stopping me. It's so sad... but it's not... but it is.
    That's the most beautiful line I've ever...
    Ohhhhh you're good.

    Cupid's a f*cking dick (uhh... no pun intended haha)


    Gorgeous.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww...sweet...

    I like it...good flow, lovely sentiment.

    It's nice.
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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