Word Magic by albery rinash

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Author:	albery rinash
ASL Info:	18/M/USA
Elite Ratio:	8 - 86/40/22
Words:	78

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	125
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	598

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Word Magic dots

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Come take a chair! Behold spell-bound!
How words enforce their magic round
Reality! (It's dozing there.)
While words unfurl their magic snare!

No wand need I, nor cauldrons, brooms!
No visions, gold or noxious fumes!
With simple thoughts, I can revoke
this ho-hum world's restrictive yoke!

Blue heavens, pink flowers,
Wise humans, brick towers.

Pink heavens, brick flowers,
Blue humans, wise towers!

As you can see, conceptually,
I've just messed up Reality!

Submitted on 2007-10-22 17:51:33 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Just a thought for the last line -

I've changed a word's reality.

or something to that affect... making it about the word.

What I really like about this is that it sounds like a spell (three witches or not). It is befitting the season too.

I like your formatting here:

reality! Be seated there!

because my mind almost sees it as:

Reality! Be seated there!

Your poem is fun to say aloud, has a great rythmn and the rhyme doesn't feel forced.

Enjoyable word play!
| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
  i enjoyed this poem, fun to read,

No wand need I, nor cauldrons, brooms!
No visions, gold or noxious fumes!
With simple thoughts, I can revoke
this ho-hum world's restrictive yoke!

very shakespeare like, nicely writen and the rhyming, wonderful.

i have difficulty here in germany helping my daughter with her english, trying to explain why words sound the same but are spellt differently,
confusing at times.
tschüß
gerry
| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
  reality is messed up already lol.
interestingly enough your messing up of reality isnt actually as messed up as you would lead the reader to think...

Pink heavens, brick flowers,
Blue humans, wise towers!

pink heavens occur at sunset
brick [red] is a colour of flowers
blue [emotional] humans
wise towers... towers of strength...

though to take your idea and apply it to life...

when i was in ethiopia i was teaching english and found it most frustrating. not because of my students inability to grasp english but because english is so retarded and makes no sense. none at all. when asked "why do we do this then but not then?" i ended up having to say "i just speak english... i dont know anything about it" lol! and the way words sound the same but arent spelt the same... ugh!

RE TAR DED!!

good effort though...
i guess if we cannot have fun with the stupidity of our language then we are missing half the point...
| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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