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    dots Submission Name: a few words from my worlddots
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    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsa few words from my worlddots
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    A few words from my world
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    Pixie of the night
    No fright
    All might
    Put up my fist to fight
    Do what I have to do to survive
    Stay alive
    Mesmorize
    I can't deny
    My fate
    Soaring in the sky
    My power rebels
    See myself looking down,
    And seeing the pits of hell.
    Living in a world of fantasy and reality
    Oh my mentality.
    My insanity over comes me
    Step through the windows of my eyes
    you'll see.
    The world is my own personal hell.
    Only the wise can tell.





    Submitted on 2007-10-22 18:23:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has very good flow. And the last line,...witty you could say. Irony is wonderful, to start some thing beautifully and twist it harshly. Great job, the subject of inner struggle is an interesting one.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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