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    dots Submission Name: Toke it Up, Live it Up dots
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    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsToke it Up, Live it Up dots
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    Toke it Up, Live it Up.
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    Sometime, my life feels like a sinking hole.
    Tormenting soul, never was my goal.
    This shit gets old.

    Makes me want to toke so bad,
    Choke........... so sad.

    Go back to my Emo ways.....
    Cut again, watch the blood turn from red to gray.

    No tears.

    No tears come from these darkened eyes,
    Someone as messed up as me never cries.

    Im the Pixie of the night.
    Fairy dust, shattered heart,
    Showing me the light , Living it Up,
    Putting up a struggling fight.

    Roll a blunt, Smoke it Up, Toke it Up, Choke it Up.

    Blurr my eyes,
    Blood pouring down my thighs.
    Pierce my leg, feel the pain ,
    Watch the blood go down the drain.
    Live it Up , go insane.

    Insanity is in my own mind.
    Anorexia, my own kind.
    Bulemia, throw it up.
    Lose the weight, then Live it Up.

    Who am I, no one cares.
    so might as well
    Give it Up
    Toke it Up
    Choke it Up
    Live it Up.

    SCREW IT UP!






    Submitted on 2007-10-22 18:24:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this write has some very good elements. The erratic description of emotion rushing through your mind and soul is very powerful, very moving. But only until "Im the Pixie of the night," does it start to get good. The beginning is weak compared to the rest as it seems very cliché.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by SuperEdgar | [ Reply to This ]
      I lived this before. I cut too. Very graphic write. strong message.
    The first 3 lines say it all. the following lines give a description that is so easy to visualize.

    I like your writing. It is very strong and depicts terrible sorrow.

    Hope you are feeling stronger today.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Crackwalker | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess different things affect people in different ways, But that is still a good general message to be putting out, They are not a "good" thing, Nice write
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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