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    dots Submission Name: A Hero's Confessionsdots
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    Author: Black Angel
    ASL Info:    15/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 12/78/71
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    dotsA Hero's Confessionsdots
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    The old man walked down the street
    Remembering what he wish to forget
    The scars on his body match the scars on his heart
    All the friends that fell stained his mind with death
    All the blood that spilled stained his hands with killing
    Born to kill is a tattoo on his heart that's won't wash away
    But deeper with in, past his friends, past the blood is the secret
    The secret that every soilder has, but no soilder says
    He can see the other bodies mixed in with his friends
    The other bodies that he shot, that he killed, that he left to rot
    Those are the faces, the spirits, the souls that truly haunt the soilder
    So the man walks, further and futher into his memory
    So the man walks, further and further into his pain
    Finally his pain is gone, he has found peace, he has found nirvana
    His body gets cold, his mind blank, but his expression is that of a smile
    Death gripped him, but peace of mind filled him
    He could finally rest in peace, he can finally forget The pain he had, and the pain he caused
    The war was over




    Submitted on 2007-10-23 11:16:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey I really like this one. It's very heart felt and all. I love it. You just captured like everything.
    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Zyiera | [ Reply to This ]
      Knowing a few real combat veterans, I can say you've managed to somehow capture their feelings very well. It troubles them the rest of their days, even if buried deep inside.

    Excellent write, but it does need some minor spelling and grammar work. I cry for them too.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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