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    dots Submission Name: Gone but not forgottendots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGone but not forgottendots
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    To all the People that have lost someone
    I dedicate this to you.

    I know it hard
    Keep your head up,
    Have hope
    there dreams are not gone
    they only be living on
    right on with you, with every heartbeat
    you push a little bit of the perished
    though your vains, keeping that bond stronger then ever
    that no one not even god himself could tear you apart forever.
    Once again you will meet up again...




    Submitted on 2007-10-23 17:12:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      heartfelt baby. :)
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      in the last line, you really shouldn't say again twice...it kinda detracts from the poem, which is really good and has an excellent message. who says this life is all there is? we'll all meet up again later. nice insights.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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