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Gone but not forgotten

Author: theman
ASL Info:    21/m/mn
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Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Bored, i know it doesn't flow

Gone but not forgotten

To all the People that have lost someone
I dedicate this to you.

I know it hard
Keep your head up,
Have hope
there dreams are not gone
they only be living on
right on with you, with every heartbeat
you push a little bit of the perished
though your vains, keeping that bond stronger then ever
that no one not even god himself could tear you apart forever.
Once again you will meet up again...

Submitted on 2007-10-23 17:12:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  heartfelt baby. :)
| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  in the last line, you really shouldn't say again kinda detracts from the poem, which is really good and has an excellent message. who says this life is all there is? we'll all meet up again later. nice insights.

i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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