What do you do when you want to commit suicide?
Grab the knife
Don't cry; your life has fallen in to a black bliss.
Slit your wrist; show no remorse
Clinch your fist; force yourself for a quicker happiness.
Relax in the bath tub; listen to your funeral music.
Make sure you have no regrets,
Because, tomorrow you’re not waking up
This is what you do when you want to commit suicide.
What do you do when you want to die?
You grab the knife
you don't cry
you clinch your fist and let your blood run down to your wrist.
You slit your wrist very deep multiple times.
You hide in the bath tub and let the blood run down your wrist and then the blood goes down the drain.
Make sure you have no regrets
because tomorrow you might not wake up.
This is what you do when you want to die.
| It was an interesting topic but i think the writing fell a little flat. i mean, it just didnt really captivate me. Suicide is a monumental thing to the person doing it because it the END. So i just think itd be a little more impressive than "blahh....suicide...its all the same...."||| Posted on 2007-10-29 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ] || Sorry|
But I think any piece about this subject is just plain STUPID. I cannot comment on the style because the subject is too wrong.
|| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ] || This is interesting though I like the top version better than the bottom, it jus seemed to have a better flow to it all together. This piece is a good mental visual. Good piece, keep writing. |
|| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ] || Very interesting and direct. The repitition with the slight variation and giving more info was well done. The title caught my eye and the read was the worth the time to check it out.|
|| Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ] |