Last Night on Earth by LadyChaos

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Submission Name: Last Night on Earth dots

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Author:	LadyChaos
ASL Info:	19/F/DE
Elite Ratio:	3.42 - 718/606/95
Words:	199

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	393
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'It's a marvelous night for a moondance, with the stars up above in the skies....a fantabulous night to make romance, neath the cover of October skies...'

Last Night on Earth dots

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I just wanna dance
Is it too much to ask?
Too old for this
Too young for everything else
But this music is alive in my blood
If that's nonsensical, then i dont care
Because there's something different

Here

Here, where you can feel my heart against your palm
Here, where neath the wave its just so calm
And the blue of my oblivion
Is my haven from your logic

Because I just wanna dance
In the moonlight, or in the rain
When it rains moonlight
Or moonlights rain
In snow and sleet
And heaven's pain
Where blue and black
Can meet again
When whispered screams
Are changing things
When the poorest pauper
comes as king

And I stand before you
Doused in mud
And soaked in bleach
I came as I was
As you wanted me
To be

And as you see
These random rhymes
And broken lines
Are a part of my melody
So Let me sing
And Let me bring
my song
Into you
So you can dance
And I can dance
And we can dance
Like it's our last night on earth.
'Cause one night
We'll be right

Submitted on 2004-06-23 01:23:36 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  Merry Meet Lady. I enjoyed the poem. It took twists and turns. But the last stanza really brought it together. Which in my opinion takes alot of talent. Everytime I read a poem of yours my admiration for you as an author grows. Keep it up. Blessed Be Andrea.
| Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
  ah, i use the word fantabulous all the time...so nice to know that someone else does too...

i can't pick out just one line...every stanza seems to be a poem in itself, yet it's all so harmonious in the way it's strung together.

i've definitely gotta get this on into my favs so i can read it again sometime...it's a reflective write...
| Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by EmeraldJealousy | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really good poem right here. It expressed its message well. There were some inconsistencies in captilization and the end sorta petered out, but the beginning was priceless. However I disagree with the overall message - at least part of the time. People seek such oblivion from the real when they would prefer to escape, hence they are sheltered from logic. The only good time to escape reality is when there is nothing you really need to escape, thus making it a journey.
shard
| Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
  I really love the lines
'I came as I was
As you wanted me
To be'
nice twist on Nirvana's 'Come as you are'. my other favourite part was
'When it rains moonlight
Or moonlights rain'.
it's a great poem with beautiful images. the flow was really good. nothing to criticize here. very well done.
| Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]

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