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    dots Submission Name: Bittersweet Darknessdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 715
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1191



    Description:
       My feelings about the most beautiful person to me.


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    dotsBittersweet Darknessdots
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    I stare into your eyes
    To see you cry
    I keep looking at your face
    Searching a beautiful place,
    I'd give a million lives
    To taste your lips,
    And I'd sell my soul
    To see your hapiness again,
    I'd take my life
    Just to see you one last time

    Chorus

    And I love the way you smile,
    I love the way you cry,
    I want to make you happy
    Never for our love to have died
    To share our losses
    And to share our dreams,
    To share our sadness,
    And to that dream and sadness
    In our bittersweet darkness.

    I reach for your hand
    To find the truth,
    I search for your heart
    To take away the pain
    And I'd give away my freedom
    Just to hear you speak,
    I'd kill a million times
    Just to touch you once more
    And I would give you all
    Just to have you here by me!

    Chorus

    Middle 8

    Chorus

    We can hide all our dreams
    We can hide all our fears
    We can hide all our hopes
    In this Bittersweet Darkness.




    Submitted on 2007-10-24 04:34:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is some good stuff you've got here. I wonder how it'll sound like being sang. These lyrics are great, I like them.
    And I guess to a certain degree, I could relate to these words. The thought that you can't see your loved ones anymore and the fact that you can only hold on to the memories is very painful. These lyrics have captured me.

    keep up the good work.
    come check out some of mine as well. =]
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by asian blonde | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. i think it took alot of thought and i just liked this all together. neato.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, i presume its your own, the only thing i would change is the last part, but hey, everyone has there oppinions huh? Not sure what i would change, but it would be something. peace.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]


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