Happy Poem

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 53

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Happy Poem

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Smile It's a sun It's a cloud it's a bird it's a sound Laugh It's a friend It's the sea it's a shell You can see Play it's a day everyone's unique it's a game You can speak Love it's your birthday you've arrived smile, laugh and play You're alive

Submitted on 2007-10-24 06:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I dont think this write is forced at all I believe you were just expressing how truly happy you are to be alive and how Thankful you are for the Friends and the Family you have I congratulate on experimenting with a new Happier style I for one very much enjoyed this!!! God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

Maybe it's just me...but it feels a little forced. I mean, I like it... I may just be crazy, and have read too many sad and violent things tonight. I think it's sweet and simple and nice...

| Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

Hey myst, been a while. been going through some stuff and it inspired me to write something. while i was on here i thought i'd check out the new posts and i saw your name. now about the poem..... Not your usual genre. To be honest, while reading the first stanza i wanted to say "It's Superman!" but i refrained. In all gravity now, though. Oddly enough, i like it. I usually don't like the happy poems about the sunshine and birthdays, but i like this one. It made me smile, and not because i was laughing (i am still kind of giggling about my superman thing) but this is nice. Shows that happiness can be found in the slightest things, even waking up in the morning. I honestly feel everyday should be a birthday, celebrating the day you were born and the fact that you're still alive. I love the idea and wish i knew how to go about writing such a happy poem...but woe is me. anyway, i got a bit off subject. good write, good message, and thanks for the smile....i needed it. Peace, Joe

| Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by frozenflame | [ Reply to This ]

I enjoy that people aren't writing dire poetry all the time. I like the sound of the poem with the simplicity of the words. Read aloud, it sounds playful but encourages the reader to be grateful for life. I like it.

| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]

What a simple poem, and yet it brigns a smile to my face. it kind of sounds like a nursery rhyme. I like it.It feels summery eventough its fall. Nice change of moods for me! Peace

| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Tradia | [ Reply to This ]

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