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    dots Submission Name: Waste dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This was something I worte in Creative Writing, it was inspired by the painting "A Waste" by Sidney Goodman. Hope you all enjoy, please comment.


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    dotsWaste dots
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    Potential,
    purpose.
    Lost to society,
    picked apart and beaten
    thrown upon the trash heap
    with the rest of the garbage
    deemed unusable, pointless;
    by the civilized home
    created by wild beasts.
    Gather at the land field,
    look upon the tortured
    human waste
    set t suffer and extinguished
    for not meeting modern standards.
    The media flocks to the site
    obtaining their gruesome footage
    so they may gloat of the destruction
    to those who uphold it
    and strike fear in those
    who are like the boy
    suspended upon his garbage thrown
    with a crimson crown made
    of his bashed in bones.




    Submitted on 2007-10-24 08:57:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know, there was something i liked, and something i didn't. Not sure what they were though! So aggrivating!><
    Love ya!
    ~SK
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]
      this was crazy but good crazy ecspecially the last three lines or so it leaves me with a great picture in my head

    well done
    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow,i do see wxactly were your going with this,potential,purpose,anytime in this messed up worl someone has potential or purpose and goes with it and doesnt make it,the world views them as nothing,they become the example,the one that no one wants to be like,the one everyone says dont end up like so and so,i like the piece,maybe there was more to it,id enjoy it if you explain it a little to me to see if i had the right idea about what you were conveying.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by thehiddenone | [ Reply to This ]


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