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    dots Submission Name: A Walk Withindots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1165
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsA Walk Withindots
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    <@> AM
    on a walk of color
    within

    The trees
    exploding
    Acolor
    are reflections
    of my journey

    Even
    abare
    I am not left
    vulnerable
    or alone
    for my roots
    stretch deep
    and grow long

    Cleansing tears
    have fallen as rains
    along the way
    filling crevices
    of fear
    and pain
    A sea of
    reflective blue
    shines from
    my eyes
    Alight!




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      I see parts of my journey reflected in yours.

    These words

    "Even
    abare
    I am not left
    vulnerable
    or alone
    for my roots
    stretch deep
    and grow long"

    Spoke deeply to me and is where I am also.

    I am glad you write of your journey too

    Kate
    xx
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is absolutely beautiful and very inspiring. I just love these lines:
    "Even
    abare
    I am not left
    vulnerable
    or alone
    for my roots
    stretch deep
    and grow long"

    Thanks for these motivating words, Epiphany, they can uplift anyone's spirits. This is truly "A Walk Within" where both the title and the verse do justice to each other.

    Outstanding work!!!
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful, I'm fav'n it! This reminds me of a place I walk (it's a state forest) that is just sooooo gorgeous and this poem made me feel like I was walking there right now, (I'm at work n can't do that right now) but I really needed this to set my mind straight, thanks tiff and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful imagery fills your words with beauty! Oh, yes, I could read this one as a lovely look at autumn; but, just perhaps, it's even more beautiful as a metaphoric view of life. Whichever your intent, this one is splendid and an enjoyable read. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this and think i understand what it is was that you were trying to achieve when you wrote it...i have a similar piece called colourful reflections....id love your thoughts on it...well done on your piece...it has a lovely feel ...and is the words are very pretty....i love nature...stormy
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderully written. i hope everything is going well. happy trees.


    tina
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty. Like an extended haiku. I'll never forget my first time driving on the Merrit Parkway on my way to boston. It was like I was driving through a tunnel of trees. You just reminded me of that. Thanks.


    Nicely
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Autumn is an inspirational season. This is a simple and enjoyable poem. I always enjoy a good fall time poem. Its actually raining right now, I'm in the city, but there are enough trees to understand.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      Having been raised in New Hampshire I tend to still have an affinity for the feelings and colors of autumn. Now that I live in Florida I have to borrow from my memory bank.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff
    Another Beautiful write from you
    In this write I was easily able to relate
    In my own life I constantly use tears for their healing power for it is true with every tear shed we are closer to becoming whole again
    Beautiful Work!!!
    It is always a Pleasure to read your writes
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch!!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I notice how you like using the word "exploding". You are sure a powerful gal.

    Fall is truly an inspiration for you, isn't it? You are mesmerized by the explosions of colour.

    I like the third stanza the best:

    "Even
    abare
    I am not left
    vulnerable
    or alone
    for my roots
    stretch deep
    and grow long" --> although fall is a time for trees to go barren, you do not worry, for your root stretch deep. Beautiful, Tiff.

    This poem is absolutely brilliantly explosion!
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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