"Fools Rush In" by Ron Cole

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Author:	Ron Cole
Elite Ratio:	3.78 - 1667/1121/181
Words:	150

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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Average Vote:	5.0000
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About a guy knowingly putting himself in the way of heartbreak from a girl that he knows will be there only for her summer holiday.

"Fools Rush In" dots

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Folklore says that fools rush in
where Angels fear to tread,
and, true to form, I let my heart
overrule my head!

One look at your delightful smile
and my heart was overcome!
My mind and body were captivated!
I had no where to run!

You led me gently by the hand,
or, more like, by the heart!
Not one time during your Summer's stay,
were we to be found apart.

At Summer's end, you went away
leaving me forlorn,
treading back down lovers paths
that, by now, were all well worn.

I call you nearly every day
re-living old memories,
treasuring the music of your voice
that means everything to me!

But I don't for even a moment regret
my heart's overruling my head;
and I don't regret my rushing in
where Angels would fear to tread!

Ron Cole
October 2007

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  This is really sweet and a great write. I could see myself or a couple of my friends doing some of the things you described. It's a little complex with the words, but this piece was really good besides that.
Keep writing.
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Katherine
| Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by Katherine_Music | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this. I was that girl to a guy last summer. And I remember it all too well. This brought back those fond memories of a summer love.
Katana
| Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this. I was that girl to a guy last summer. And I remember it all too well. This brought back those fond memories of a summer love.
Katana
| Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  Actually, I believe Elvis Presley sung "wise men say/only fools rush in/but I can't help falling in love with you.." though the "where angels fear to tread" is an interesting change to that metaphor. And also a healthy reminder to myself to listen to my Elvis collection, I've been ignoring it ;)

But enough of my babbling. The second stanza reminds me (sigh, metaphors) of the phrase "don't frown, you never know who is falling in love with your smile".

In fact the entirety of the piece reminds me of a sad version of Summer Love, it's a classic, I'm not sure who sung it. But as always, it has your signature ability with rhyme. Nicely done.

Happy New Year!

Cheers
Azuire

| Posted on 2008-01-04 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
  This verse/story is a joy to read. Nice description, i could see every thing clearly. And these lines very realistically sum up a familiar sight...

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treading back down lovers path
that, by now, were all well worn.

Your hero has enough nerve to accept and celebrate his own perceived "folly."Quite a light hearted piece from you.

Very interesting!!!
| Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
  This kind of reminds me of my summer??? You been spying on me Ron? (smile) Just Kidding.
Great write as always.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  I think many of us have down that road Ron. I thought the topic, theme, structure and the story you told, is quite superb. And you managed to tie it all together with a great rhyme scheme.

Great stuff from you once again.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  The Boys of Summer, or the Girls of summer in your case...oh those summer romances. Had one or two in the lifetime (that I'll admit to).
Very nicely written, your word choice and description are right on and yes, you brought me back a couple of years and thoughts of yesterday.
thanks,
Lisa
| Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
  Many have probably tread the path of summer romance to be left with an empty longing. You took me back to younger days and thoughts of many I met during summers that somehow slipped into oblivion. Enjoyed looking back with you! Sharon
| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  it seems good,but its a little confusing.
i dont know. it might just be me. i love your way of writing but something about this poem didnt click for me. it didnt flow right. some of it was a littttle forced. all in all it wasnt to bad. :)
im sorry im being a litle tough.
i really did like it:):)
| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]

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