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These clothes are crawling up my skin Want to tear them off And tear the skin underneath them And wear someone else's lies For a change

Submitted on 2007-10-24 19:33:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Very Very True Why does it always seem people are hiding behind a fake fascade Once we believe we truly no someone and trust them as a True Friend they always seem to change and become someone new I swear at least 50 percent of society does not know who their true self is Thank You for sharing this Perhaps and I Hope it does this write will wake up some people to once again become their trueselves God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

I dont think that you should change anything except perhaps the use of 'tear' twice...perhaps you could say peel the second time or something but apart from that...i understand and relate to this poem...i think it is how we can feel about ourselves when we know we have been deceitful and we are finding it very difficult to live with the lies...it is usually at this point i have to be honest with myself or whom it is i am deceiving because it is going to eat at me otherwise...if this is not what it is about then it is what it makes me feel and think of lol....it is short and to the point...normally something so short could feel incomplete but this packs a punch of truth...stormy

| Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

oooooooh...hmmm. I don't know exactly how to feel about this. I agree with eno1, though...it kind of punches you...though it punched my gut instead of my face. Ah well...at least I can hide the bruising!

| Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

i think it should be "crawling on..." instead of "up". justa thought. this is one of those pieces that just balls up a tight little fist and punches you right in the face. no messin' around. i like it. 1

| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]

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